I write in bits and pieces and found that I had two different opening sentences for the scifi story I am writing. The opening could change as the story progresses, but the opening leads to the next paragraph so an enticing first sentence is important even for the initial draft of the story.
The point is that I need your help. Which of these sentences do you find more interesting, sentence one or sentence two?
- Asher felt the flood of sensations throughout his body fading as he whipped through the dimly lit green hallways of the City. He had traveled this path many times before; shifting his weight to get the best traction from his hover shoes.
- Never before had he been this excited. He couldn’t wait to tell Arin about his new job. Asher briskly grabbed her arm as Arin tried to duck around the corner. He didn’t understand why she was so startled when he came up beside her. “Are you ok?” he asked.
Whether or not you like to read science fiction, would purchase this book, or read my blog, I have a feeling you would have an opinion about the sentence you like best. I’d love to hear from you.